Critisim on this short excerpt from my story? Please and thank you?

Judging by this excerpt, your story's plot sounds very interesting :) You should add some more description of the main character's feelings, like after Kia kissed him for example. We can't tell if he likes it but is afraid? Or plain out doesn't like her? What is Liam thinking as he looks down at the city? Also some more setting description would be nice. Other than that it looks very good. Lots of dialogue :)